Constructive Commentary

Hello Barsha Pokharel,

I read your article "The Student's Voice for their Tuition Fees", and I noticed that you are mentioning just the advantages of getting federal financial help; however, there are some disadvantages that are worth mentioning to make the article a little more informative. Examples of these disventanges are that it will increase the federal external debt, and it will make universities more competitive in their acceptance due to the high number of applicants.
     I like that you mentioned the real life example of your friend who has struggle with the work, school and family. I understand her because I am going through the same situation. In addition, I liked that you provided facts to the article making it more persuasive. These facts can convince other people to support your arguments. Finally, I would say that I love your article, and I support your ideas. I also believe that it will be incredible to have a more educate country avoiding the struggle through college.
     In conclusion, I will recommend to mention the disadvantages of the arguments and to try of minimizing their affect on the reader. I love the usage of the real life example and the facts provided. I hope this comment helps you in your future and I would like to thank you for your work.

     

As many people knows The Unites States of America is going through a rough financial crisis, and it is urgent that the President and the correspondent agencies take care of the debt by finding a solution. During the past years politicians haven't made anything to end the debt, and they had focused on healthcare and foreign policies that didn't make any contribution to the U.S. In fact, those policies had increased our debt up to 20 trillion dollars, and they had produced government shutdowns.

         The national government on this election should focus more on the national debt. Let’s get a little honest and clear. The United States of America aren’t that powerful anymore and its budget should be wisely used. The congress should cut a lot of the military spending that is around 598 billion dollars, and the presidential candidates should be thinking on improve America not on spend 60 billion dollars on a wall that will be totally useless. Honestly, on this presidential race I have heard more candidates attacking each other and either of them present a plan of how they will improve America. This morning I was looking for any U.S. government article and what I found was “FBI investigates Hillary’s emails” or “Trump taxes are unclear”. I am not a genius as you can see, but I don’t need to be a genius to know that the U.S. is falling a part and nobody sees to care about it.

         Politicians should end filibusting the citizens of the U.S. I believe it would be a great idea to cut military budget and invest on new jobs since the tax are the primarily source of income to the U.S government. Also they should focus on education with education it comes the advance and new minds will emerge. The companies now in days demand high skill workers, so we need a better education system that don’t get us in a debt for life.

         In conclusion, The United States of American isn’t that powerful anymore other countries are advancing faster that we are, so we should cut military budget, avoid useless expenses like wall and to try to create we jobs by improving our infrastructure and healthcare fields. We need to get seriousness about our democracy because the representatives we get to choose aren’t the adequate they should care more about our country and less on attacking others.